雅思写作中，我们一贯的写作习惯将自己的文章拉低了很多档次，接下来看看几组比较典型的很难被发现"的表达易犯毛病。你是否中枪了？

eg.1.可以尝试把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。

Weak:Thetreesarebare.Thegrassisbrown.Thelandscapeseemsdrab.

Revision:Thebrowngrassandbaretreesformadrablandscape.(转换为前置定语)

Or:Thelandscape,bareandbrown,beggedforspringgreen.(转换为并列结构作后置定语)

eg.2.细节控：将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词

1)Weak:Theteammembersaregoodplayers.

Revision:Theteammembersplaywell.

2)Weak:Oneworker'splanistheeliminationoftardiness.

Revision:Oneworker'splaneliminatestardiness.

改进后读起来会更舒服。

eg.3.在以here"或there"开头的句子汇总，把be"动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。

Weak:Thereisnoopportunityforpromotion.

Revision:Noopportunityforpromotionexists.

eg.4.可以话，尽量运用主动语态。

1)Weak:Theorganizationhasbeensupportedbycharity.

Revision:Charityhassupportedtheorganization.

2)Weak:Thebiscuitswerestackedonaplate.

Revision:Motherstackedthebiscuitsonaplate.

eg.5.防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。

1)Weak:Mylittlesisterhasapreferenceforchocolatemilk.

Revision:Mylittlesisterpreferschocolatemilk.

2)Weak:Weareinreceiptofyourletterandintendtofollowyourrecommendations.

Revision:Wehavereceivedyourletterandintendtofollowyourrecommendations.

eg.6.杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。

Weak:Theywillnotagreetohisproposalsinanyshapeorform.

Revision:Theywillnotagreetoanyofhisproposals.